Campaign challenge

So I'm back on the campaign trail, and I'm NOT removing my post this time.  The challenge is to use a prompt and there were additional challenges that were optional, but since I'm new to this kind of thing, I'm keeping it simple and using only one prompt.
I'm using the picture below and doing a 200 word short story based on it.

Mackenzie was the nine year old daughter of a high-ranking executive at a large tech company.  She lived in a gated community and attended private school, where no one ever said a harsh word to her, despite her sometimes appalling behavior.

On this particular occasion, the executive had traveled to India on business, bringing Mackenzie with him.  As he talked on his Blackberry and typed on his laptop, Mackenzie pressed her nose against the window of the black limo that had picked them up from the airport.  It was a strange world that she saw passing by.  As the limo paused in traffic, she saw a large area of garbage with children her age picking through it.  Grabbing her father's sleeve, she yanked insistently on it until he looked up.

"Papa, Papa, what are they doing."

After a quick glance, he turned his attention back to his computer.  "Just playing, now don't interrupt again, okay?"

Mackenzie gazed after them as the limo pulled away.  They didn't look like they were playing to her, but Papa knew everything.

The shirtless boy looked up in time to see the car with a girl staring after him.  His haunted eyes stared back.

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There you have it!  200 words exactly.  AND, I am open to critiques.  I would love to have your honest feedback!